“Sales Pitch for the Last Person on Earth” is all right, but not quite what I was looking for. I think that it’s safe to admit that. Sometimes, one’s reach exceeds one’s grasp. And I think that it’s important to be honest about this stuff.
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The premise is really interesting. I would suggest showing the narrator’s situation rather than telling it. Perhaps having him sitting in some restricted area (such as the Oval Office) kicking himself because he told the last salesman to go away, or supremely satisfied that he got his perfect world without paying for it.
It might help to set the story 20 or 30 years after the Migration, and the world is beginning to reflect the absence of humanity.