Feb
28
2020

‘Son of a Preacher Man.’

3 Comments

  • acat says:

    Mr. Lane,
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    I am not a copy-editor. However ..
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    In your (quite enjoyable) short story “ANSTEORRA RANGERS”, the following sentence is missing a word:
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    The Imperium’s own mages were saying that the spell probably killed at least a thousand Dominion mages outright, and permanently [???] another four, five thousand.
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    The following sentence appears to go from plural “mudnadoes” to singular “it” .. slightly awkward.
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    The big advantage he had was that mudnadoes were just as dumb as they were clumsy. It could move a fair clip, which nearly got Mike killed right away at the start of the chase, but it got, ha!, winded fast.
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    After that point, I got sufficiently into the story that any additional copy-editing bugs flowed right past without my notice .. which is why I’m not a copy-editor.
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    Thank you for a very enjoyable morning read!
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    Mew

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