Off to the book fair!

11 thoughts on “Off to the book fair!”

1. Best of luck, break a leg, edit as appropriate.
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   Are you taking a minion?
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   Mew

   1. “He moved toward a tangle of branches and garbage, that’d perhaps been materials for future expansion of the next.”

      — Morgan Barod by Moe Lane

      Perhaps nest, not next?

      1. …THAT bug did not. 🙂

   2. No minions. Very tired now. 🙂

2. This time Morgan did get a few dropso on bare skin—and it took a little dirt to get the burning sensation to stop.”

   — Morgan Barod by Moe Lane

   … dropso?

   1. That bug got stomped already.

      1. I apologize for bringing up any pre-smashed bugs… finally having time and brain to savor a re-read and thought I’d mention the ones I notice.
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         Mew

         1. No worries. Bug-stomping is an eternal task. 🙂

3. Partially it was jsut curiosity; professionally, knowing as much as he could about Red Bank these days might prove useful later.”

   — Morgan Barod by Moe Lane

   … jsut sayin’

4. Mary Rosen was a middle-aged woman, with hair and eyes almost the exact shade of brown, and a no-nonsense air about her.”

   — Morgan Barod by Moe Lane

   Exactly what shade of brown are the hair and eyes? Dark chocolate? Cinnamon?

   This is a well written sentence, it just feels like there’s a descriptive missing.

   Mew

   1. Didn’t see any others…

      Also, enjoyed the re-read and would like to purchase the next one, please.

      Mew

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