I know where it’s going to end up; but I think that 8K words is barely enough time to deal with the monster in front of our hero — what’s that? Yes. Of course there’s a monster. Obviously. I’m not calling it ETERNAL NIGHT OF THE MOON-BEASTS because it’s a [cowboy]-[nurse] romance story*.
Anyway, spent time thinking about how to make this scene a real short story instead of, well, just a scene.
Moe Lane
*Do those exist? …Well, they probably do now. You’re welcome?
Please. PLEASE. Tell me it is just very bad page formatting on your part.
I’m not sure I can continue reading your work if you provide the world with a beastial menage a trois.
Unless it was tastefully done.
Or absolutely filthy.
There is no middle ground.
Who’s to say either the cowboy or the nurse are not themselves bestial, given Moe’s past work?
I put brackets around the words so you could all tell, you filthy-minded wretches (said he, admiringly].
Didn’t In Harm’s Way have a cowboy-nurse romance subplot? Well, okay, it was naval officer-nurse, but the naval officer was portrayed by John Wayne. Therefore: cowboy-nurse romance.
Cowboy-nurse would be fine.
As printed it reads cow-boy-nurse.
Which is an abomination.
Not seeing it on my devices… I blame WordPress, not Moe.
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Mew