Tag: snippet

I will need to put these two into more scenes.

Dead dude’s Freddie Baldwin Cuaron.

I want to punch this up a bit more though, maybe. Give it more of that old staccato oomph.

“So are you going to go after Wolfie again?” I asked Elizabeth. She looked down at her mug of tea like she had stashed an answer there, then shook her head.

“He’s too powerful. I don’t know what he did to me, when I died. I don’t even know if first edition Elizabeth really know what he did. But, ha, Wolfie is strong. Too strong for me to beat him in a straight-up wizard’s duel.”

“Yeah,” I said. “You know, you shouldn’t have done that. At least, not in the middle of the city!”

Elizabeth looked contrite and defiant at the same time, like she agreed with me and wanted to do it again anyway. “I’m less than a week old. That count for anything?”

“Sure, but don’t go too many times to that well. So, he’s too powerful. You think you can take Wolfie down if somebody else takes the shine off him a little?” I wouldn’t mind it if somebody else did the heavy lifting for a change. And if anybody deserved last dibs on Wolfie, it’d be Elizabeth.

It may be too cute. I don’t really want to explain the joke, though. I’ll let the beta readers have their input before I decide.

I needed some more characters, and this one sort of shoved her way forward. I’d object, except that before I was straining to write twenty five words and once she showed up I was pushing a thousand. And she’ll get even more!